You’ve arrived at the restaurant and you’re hungry; hungry with anticipation! You’ve been told about the comfortable interior, the superb service, and the chef’s fabulous skills.

The meal is exquisite. Each course? Sublime The wine? Perfectly paired. The after-dinner chocolates? Divine. Unfortunately, you must now take your leave,

Despite parting with a sizeable amount of money, your enthusiasm has not been diminished, and, as you walk back home, you type few lines about your experience:

➤ A great dinner. Fantastic food and very cozy atmosphere. The whole service was excellent. I hope we can return to Bristol and repeat the Chefs table experience.

Of course, walking and typing are a poor combination; nevertheless, we could do better! Why? Well:

▪︎ short sentences create a stilted effect
▪︎ disjointed subjects, requiring reader to re-read
▪︎ grammar

Yes, we can do better: first, write when not walking! Next, gather like subject with like: dinner, ambience, and service; conclude. Check for flow.

How would you rewrite this review?

Structure and readability

Scientific papers and articles frequently write like this:

➤ The use of polymers to produce prosthetic heart valves that have the positive attributes of current commercial and mechanical valves without any of their drawbacks, has been a focus of research since the 1950s.

However, it does not read will and requires multiple readings. Help your read and create flow:

➤ Since the 1950s, scientists have been trying to use polymers to produce prosthetic heart valves which have the positive attributes of current commercial and mechanical valves, but without any of their drawbacks.

Formal writing has its place but whether you are writing for a general audience, or highly knowledgable, readability and flow are essential.

To keep it readable:

▪︎ make subjects people rather than concepts and place the main verb close to the subject
▪︎ choose strong verbs, check punctuation, and avoid unnecessarily long sentences

What advice would you add?