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You’ve arrived at the restaurant and you’re hungry; hungry with anticipation! You’ve been told about the comfortable interior, the superb service, and the chef’s fabulous skills.
The meal is exquisite. Each course? Sublime The wine? Perfectly paired. The after-dinner chocolates? Divine. Unfortunately, you must now take your leave,
Despite parting with a sizeable amount of money, your enthusiasm has not been diminished, and, as you walk back home, you type few lines about your experience:
➤ A great dinner. Fantastic food and very cozy atmosphere. The whole service was excellent. I hope we can return to Bristol and repeat the Chefs table experience.
Of course, walking and typing are a poor combination; nevertheless, we could do better! Why? Well:
▪︎ short sentences create a stilted effect
▪︎ disjointed subjects, requiring reader to re-read
Yes, we can do better: first, write when not walking! Next, gather like subject with like: dinner, ambience, and service; conclude. Check for flow.
How would you rewrite this review?