What a flight!

You’ve waited months. Now, you’re dining and enjoying a delectable meal. The time passes quickly, too quickly, but go you must. With memory fresh and excitement high, you wish to share your enthusiasm. Naturally you message a friend, your brother and even a distant aunt, but you still want other people to know.

So, like any normal person, you post your view on TripAdvisor:

➤ 7 course taster menu was absolutely flawless. Absolutely recommend the wine flight as well. Front of house staff were fantastic and the chef coming out to every table after their meal was finished was a very personal touch

However, upon re-reading, you notice the flow of thoughts has not translated into a flowing review:

▪︎ the two short sentences make the review choppy
▪︎ repetitive: absolutely
▪︎ group like with like
▪︎ tighten to improve flow

By creating two balanced sentences, with a subordinate clause, we can write a short review which flows:

➤ The 7-course taster menu was flawless and I highly recommend the wine flight.The front of house staff were fantastic and the personal touch from the chef, who thanked each table once they had finished, was much appreciated.

The question is: how would you rewrite this review? What would you do differently?
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