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A breathtaking property16/10/2023 Clarity is not only the opposite of obscurity. Sometimes what we read takes time to process, but not because the information is important, emotional or thought-provoking. Rather, the information is expressed unfavourably so it requires reorganising or reprocessing:
[1] To view this breathtaking one of a kind property, get in touch today to arrange a viewing. ■ confusing word choice = [verb ➤ view] and [noun ➤ viewing] ■ phrase acting as adjective = create compound adjective: one-of-a-kind ■ repeated instruction = [to view] and [to arrange] ■ wordy = get in touch ■ unsuitable adjective = breathtaking ■ multi-syllable adjective prevents flow = breathtaking one-of-a-kind If we restructure, we can improve its readability: [2] Contact us to view this spectacular property. [3] To view this spectacular property, contact us. Do you agree with the revised version?
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