An exquisite menu

Sometimes our enthusiasm has less of an impact than we think:

➀ I was advised to try the tasting menu, luckily i did, it was amazing, the wine paired exquisitely.

Ending with an adverb means the reader needs to go back to find the modified word. Rephrasing gives the review its impact:

➀ I was advised to try the tasting menu; and glad I was! It was amazing: both menu and wine were exquisitely paired.

Writing one sentence with multiple ideas is confusing and difficult to read πŸ˜•. By using β€˜Not only’, we introduce an element of surprise 😯. We can also add impact by removing adverbs and use stronger, more descriptive adjectives πŸ€“.

The tightened sentence is easier to read and has more impact. 😎

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